Fic - She Stands

[fidelitas]

Title: She Stands
Rating: K
Pairing: Implied Susan/Caspian
Summary: Caspian sees the unexpected in Susan’s eyes.
Disclaimer: I own a bit of that Su/Cas ‘ship thing. And that is all, amigos.
A/N:  Entry for Weekly Drabble Challenge #2 at susancaspian.

She is a Queen of Old, standing before me. Never in my years would I have expected to see a creature of such quiet beauty, especially this woman who made her mark on Narnia’s surface, even centuries after she danced with every step. And she stands before me.

She is not a statue with a crown of flowers that blow away in a breeze, but a young woman with a crown of dark brown hair to frame her delicate face in that wind. She is as human as I, but with years behind her that I can only hope to uncover one day.

But her eyes strike me more than anything else. The years she has witnessed swim in those dark pools, rising to the surface to take breaths of the present, to stay alive. Despite her bright presence and gentle smile, I see agony, pain, death, war.

And yet she stands before me, as herself in this moment.

Comments

[yourstar202.livejournal.com]

Beautiful! I loved it! I can't wait for more of your work!!!

[dancing-in-time.livejournal.com]

Yay! Sorry it's short, I felt all artistic and wanted fewer words than usual, lol.

[chatonelle.livejournal.com]

that was so deep and touching.

yes i love it!

[dancing-in-time.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I had the idea pop into my head and had to run with it. I'm very glad I did!

[tuesday-skies.livejournal.com]

I think a shorter amount of words really made this seem rather poetic. I loved it. :] You chose just the right words to make this all come together and be great.

[dancing-in-time.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I agree with the word count; sometimes you need to go on and on and other times you can get away with just a quick dip in the water.

[defying-reason.livejournal.com]

Dude... Caspian is a poet at heart.

This really touched me for some reason, I got teary-eyed. Must be your writing style.

Awesome prompt entry :)

[dancing-in-time.livejournal.com]

You know? He totally is. He's a mischievous kid who has that softy interior. Awesome guy.

Aww, thanks! I'm glad you liked it (and my style)!

Awesome prompt :)

[accionargles.livejournal.com]

that was sooo beautiful, it really really made all the difference with your choice of words, and i love how it's so short too! you are so talented, you have to keep writing!

tragically beautiful :)

[dancing-in-time.livejournal.com]

Aww, thank you so much! And don't worry, I'll continue writing till my fingers fall off! And then I'll just have to train my toes to work for me, lol.

[accionargles.livejournal.com]

score, lol take one for the casue team :D

[baroque-tragedy.livejournal.com]

Pretty lyrical prose. :) It's short, but you managed to pack quite a bit of detail & emotion into your drabble. Ahhh, I love it!

[dancing-in-time.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I love being all poetic and stuff sometimes, lol.